Another poem: Waiting for your comments

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Permalink Reply by Donna Montrose Porter on July 25, 2011 at 9:44pm

What a lovely poem,  really enjoy this one, well done, it was refreshing and sweet and painted a good picture xx

Permalink Reply by Robert L. Allen on July 26, 2011 at 4:23am

I like the contrast from the green leaf onto the changing of seasons, but it seemed like you were holding something back. Perhaps write it again but slow down and seach inside. I might be wrong, but I think the piece could be much stronger. I know you can do it...

Permalink Reply by Shira Loustaunau on July 26, 2011 at 4:24pm

Sad, yet full of life. Who doesn't think of her/himself as the 'old, gold leaf' (at least for me that is)? The juxtiposition of the new life of  '...a little green one' with the decaying old one is wonderful; life, death and rebirth through nature is captured.  S.