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About this poem: I wrote it for my friends when i wrote this some of them werethinking of  hurting themselves very harshly this poem means so much to me and to them!

Please leave your advice and comments below! Thank you

 



Wasted?:   

You’re not

A waste of space

Just a smile never seen

Your laugh never heard

You hide yourself in a fountain of pain

Every day is always pain

Never feel wasted

Always be true

You’re not a waste

You’re a persons

Whole world and a part of my life

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Short, nice, and so true! Self inflicted pain is as much or more so to those who love you dearly. There are no wasted lives in life as each life has a ripple effect on so many others around it.

Dear Carly

I think you've captured some excellent sentiments(your poem) on a subject that is not only deep but afflicks a number of young people. A poem can explain much in a few words. So well done for that.  Now to carry that message on to others you've used the vehicle of poetry. I've used poetry for a number of reasons in the past: litter; drugs; assault; the death of a clown; thoughts of an old soldier; sea rescue and the associated disaster.  My latest effort represents an anthology of war poems for the charity Combat Stress. I am proud to be included in 'Enduring Freedom.' ISBN 9781908487018

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

Best wishes

Cleveland

 


Cleveland I have been trying to get my poems published this one I would like to get out into the hands of readers as quick as possible if you have any tips that may help my accomplish this goal I would appretiate it alot....
Cleveland W. Gibson said:

Dear Carly

I think you've captured some excellent sentiments(your poem) on a subject that is not only deep but afflicks a number of young people. A poem can explain much in a few words. So well done for that.  Now to carry that message on to others you've used the vehicle of poetry. I've used poetry for a number of reasons in the past: litter; drugs; assault; the death of a clown; thoughts of an old soldier; sea rescue and the associated disaster.  My latest effort represents an anthology of war poems for the charity Combat Stress. I am proud to be included in 'Enduring Freedom.' ISBN 9781908487018

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

Best wishes

Cleveland

 

Thank you both for reading you both found the meaning before any of my friends (the one who thought of injury) did!
Thanks for reading
Carly Jean

Hi Carly
The subject of your poem is not only sensitive but needs proper handling. To publish as it stands need,IMO, more content and a very strong theme all the way through that will interest the reader, no matter how serious the topic. FYEO is my consideration. Please request being a friend then we can exchange text and info if you feel you'd like me to help.


Cleveland

Poetry award winner 2011  www.CELJ.org

Carly Jean Montgomery-Wildermuth said:
Cleveland  this one(poem) I would like to get  to  readers as quick as possible if you have any tips  I would appretiate it alot....
Cleveland W. Gibson said:

My question is what will you do with your poem? It ought to be published.

 

I like this poem. I like to think of myself as a true poet to society. Sometimes by reading someone else's poem I am able to create. Her's one for your friends.

 

I am here and you are there, hold onto today,

we may be worlds apart but my heart is open

My ears are open to your pain and suffering

Hold onto the here and now

I have seen the world at war

hav e watch a full grown man cry

have seen myself hit drugs only to fall on my face

but today I am writing to you.

Hold it up and keep your head up!

Go ahead and cry if it helps..I do. 

I am here. 

No one is ever alone..your friend is here also.

Hilary Wreidt Thompson

i love it because i can relate to it, sometimes i feel like a waste or i don't have no reason for being here. however your poem prove me wrong..thank you 

That is why I write to make others feel better I'm very happy that i helped you you are very welcome. (:
 
FELISHA FRANCIS said:

i love it because i can relate to it, sometimes i feel like a waste or i don't have no reason for being here. however your poem prove me wrong..thank you 

Wow, I really like this. Defiantly inspirational. It's funny because I have one that's like exact opposite of this...called waist of molecular space, I will post it soon, but it was written when I was pretty upset/angry

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