"Second stanza, fourth and sixth sentences stops the flow, might think a rewrite.
Third stanza, third sentence, very powerful!
The ending leaves more to come. Powerful piece with a lot of emotion.
Just a thought; forth…"
Those who wear the masksShe hides in the back trying to changePraying for a chance for someone to careA stranger to say she holds beauty other than the friends all dayBut she is not one of themThose who go around with no hips, no thighs, and no idea how hard life can beA chance to prove her loyalty He hides with his friends knowing there trustHe loves himself the way he isWaiting some boy to love him for who he is and what he holdsKnowing the way he presents himself should make him no…See More
Note: Readers this poem is about societies view and my view on the term perfection. But none the less this is my view/oppinion on the subject of perfection, read, comment advice and if you have any ideas for poems OR would like me to write a personal poem for you please message me. Thank you :) Perfection:Such an ugly term, perfectionDoes it truly exist?And if it is amongst this worldDefine it for me and societyHow do you change society?For them to change their view on perfectionIt is not a…See More
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