A Brighter Day!

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Permalink Reply by Hilary Wreidt Thompson on December 24, 2011 at 3:28pm

This is really an enjoyable poem to read and re-read.

Permalink Reply by Jonathon Koerner on December 24, 2011 at 6:05pm

Lol this my little brother, styles are similar but still different.

Permalink Reply by Robert L. Allen on January 3, 2012 at 2:00am

Very nice poem but the rhyme changes from every sentence to every other halfway through. I would keep the rhythm going one way or the other. The poem hold sadness and hope. I would take out the first word maybe to make it even stronger...And also the word (may) in the next sentence down, I would change to, will... Isee this poem published...

 

Permalink Reply by Birgitta Abimbola Heikka on January 6, 2012 at 6:02pm

Lovely poem.  Short but to the point.  The lines flow into each other.  I liked the last two lines, especially.

Permalink Reply by Tabitha R. Pike on January 7, 2012 at 1:07pm

This is a lovely write. I enjoyed it.