Authors, Writers, Publishers, and Book Readers

Life we breath, heart beats in sync
I can feel, only what is real
Your touch, relieves pain in such a way
Maybe there is a brighter day?
For now wish only for you to stay
Just laying by my side, applied life in my lifeless soul
Warmth melting the cold,molding a new me
Which is free, no longer to be  imprisoned
See vision of life, in our endless nights
Only to be remembered, in my December

Views: 37

Replies to This Discussion

Just laying by my side, applied life in my lifeless soul

This is a wonderful line. Actually the entire poem is beautiful; it holds such reverence love. You don't find this to often but when you do you become more, better, in a deeper way. Loved this write. Thanks for sharing this with us.

@Tabitha Thx glad you enjoyed it.

Powerful!!! I would try to stay away from the ( to be ) phazes. And I think you were trying to say in the first line we breathe. Forth sentence down has a (?) mark, not needed, it's a statement, not a question...

@robert. Thanks, yes very powerful. But 4th line, I did mean it as a question, like I was asking either all the readers or her, is there really a brighter day? And guess first line was worded weird, but meant, together we breath LIFE,lol not just breath. But thanks for advice,these are all rough drafts.


Sponsored Links

Most Active Members

1. Edward F. T. Charfauros

San Diego, CA, United States

2. RF Husnik

Green Bay, WI, United States

3. Rosemary Morris

Watford, United Kingdom

© 2020   Created by   Powered by

Badges  |  Report an Issue  |  Terms of Service