Authors, Writers, Publishers, and Book Readers
Tried my hand at a Sicilian octave. in researching it, i found several notes in how rare they are in English. I have since discovered (experienced) why. =)
The poem is personal and describes movement from an area of bad (feelings, experiences, etc.) to good.
What does anyone think about it?
Joker pleased; displace from that which is grim
Troth is the wind for sailing beyond stagnation
Fortitude be the tiller; hold tight past that is dim
Mercy navigates the seas of tribulation
Yearn ambition and aplomb; invest on a whim
Vow for dedication in emulation
Ignite ardor; embark Farr in random vim
Mold in strife: digest in the declaration.
Written thoughts , without punctuation create a jerky scenario.
It is difficult to draw in all the good ideas if they are seen
as never quite finished off. A poem often functions best
when a story unfolds, remember the Ballad of Reading
Jail by Oscar Wilde? Or a shorter one like The Highwayman.
With whom do you compare your poem?
Readers love to relate to poetry and the characters within.
Give the reader a chance to do that or if your poem is inspirational
spell it out clearly and in rhyme. Have fun.
I love this poem. It flows nicely and I can relate to the words. I especially love the 3rd line: "Fortitude be the tiller; hold tight past that is dim." I think it's a nice poem. We all relate to things differently. I learnt some new words--troth and vim. (Never heard those words before now).