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I write a variety of poems. Here is a fun one with a limit of 150 words.

Gerald the toy soldier came to town,
his smart red jacket hanging down,
face unwashed, filled with grime,
as his wooden feet danced in time.

On his shoulders he held a black chest,
closed by seven keys, seven locks, and the rest.
Painted on the chest was the Flag of Sin,
black and white bones in a deadly grin.

The mystery of the chest grew and grew,
as from it wafted smoke so blue.
A loud bang and a flash of light,
Dead Man's chest gone from sight.

The clink of gold heard on high
as coins rained down from the sky,
Quick as a flash I grabbed  all.
Ran to the pub with a Pirate's haul.

But Pirate's Gold carried a curse,
we grew three heads, nothing worse.
“Call it a day,” I said with a grin,
“I still have a map, and a bottle of gin.”

 

I enjoy this light hearted poetry.I wrote this one and others for one newspaper.  It takes me away from some of the poems I've written about war,etc.

Do you stick to one type of poem?

Best

Cleveland

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                    Water

Roars down the mountians

Always to the sea

The mother of creation

Flows wild and free

Rises to the heavens

Floats opon a breeze

Falls as a gift of life

Soaks the grass and trees

When the need is pressing

Comes to save the day

Sometimes with great violence

Washes all away

 

Thanks for taking the time to read and respond to my poems. I really appreciate the help.I'm just starting to try my hand at this and I can use all the help I can get. Your experence shows in your work. Thanks again, Keith.

I write all types. War is not only across the seas. Sometimes the greatest wars are fought within. I like your poem. I've only written one or two fun poems. When I write, I let the poem take me over and where I end up is where the poem wants to go... 


Robert Allen said:
I write all types. War is not only across the seas. Sometimes the greatest wars are fought within. I like your poem. I've only written one or two fun poems. When I write, I let the poem take me over and where I end up is where the poem wants to go... 
That's good. Styles and methods of writing poetry vary . I'm not a poet , more of a writer/author but what I've written in poetry has been published. Some I'm holding back on as I've a new publisher. Inspiration and a feeling for words all help in writing prose or poetry.
Best wishes


Keith Rice said:

                    Water

Roars down the mountians

Always to the sea

The mother of creation

Flows wild and free

Rises to the heavens

Floats opon a breeze

Falls as a gift of life

Soaks the grass and trees

When the need is pressing

Comes to save the day

Sometimes with great violence

Washes all away

 

Thanks for taking the time to read and respond to my poems. I really appreciate the help.I'm just starting to try my hand at this and I can use all the help I can get. Your experence shows in your work. Thanks again, Keith.

You are welcome, Keith. Take care with what you read. Also develop a love of music lyrics. They are poems after all. And have to be short, etc.

Best

Cleveland

Ingenious!  I think authors.com is filled with very talented people.

Many thanks, Birgitta,

You might care to read my latest submission to Soldier magazine called 'Dear Husband.' I'm sure you'll enjoy it.

To access the poems pages, visit www.soldiermagazine.co.uk, click onto linkline, then click poems. At the bottom of the page is 'Dear Husband.'

Best wishes

Cleveland

Award winner www.celj.org

Hi Cleveland,

I tried replying to your comments yesterday but my computer was not working right.  I would love to read some more of your poems.  You might like to check a poem I just posted yesterday--"The Masquerade."  I think you are a better writer than I am so wouldn't mind some honest, critical comment.

 

Thanks

Abimbola.  (I go by my middle name; but it's ok if you prefer Birgitta)

Hi Abimbola

Many thanks for reading my pirate poem and our kind comments. Wish I had some of that gold to make life interesting. You are welcome to read other poems I've written. They vary but then that's the fun of poems.

Now I took a look at your poem as you requested. 'The masquerade' is interesting but not only that it is a slice of life from Nigeria. Do you know elements of what you wrote has often cropped up in the myths and legends of other countries. There are 'bad characters' in India, even Japan. Here in England there is a joke that the 'Bogey man ' will get children.

I think I read on your page that you are from Nigeria. I'd then look at your poem as  representing a slice of life in that country. I feel then your poem needs to be revised a little and then edited. I see your poem in a slightly different way to how you see it. But not bad I must add. One thing you've not brought yourself into the poem. You've used the children as your subject/group when it ought to have been you. My main suggestion would be to rewrite with your POV. With that in mind I'm happy to offer my help  should you decide you want to take your poem further.Let me know. Need to be friends if you want to use the personal message system on site. I'm more than interested in how your poem develops.

Best for now

Cleveland                                                                                                     

 

Welcome to the site.

Many thanks. It was something for the kids to enjoy.

Sorry it took me a long time to reply to you; I have been very busy.  Appreciate your comments.  Would gladly rewrite using first person  (instead of chldren) and then perhaps you can help edit.   I am very new to the group so I'm not quite familiar with using all the features.  Don't know how to go about adding you as a friend.  So, perhaps, you can add me to your list of friends.  I am actually half Swedish and half Nigerian but was born and brought up in Nigeria; hence, the two dissimilar names.

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