Comments - I Waited - Authors.com2024-03-29T09:42:02Zhttp://www.authors.com/profiles/comment/feed?attachedTo=3798404%3ABlogPost%3A1296&xn_auth=noJa ja Darn not another mistak…tag:www.authors.com,2009-10-07:3798404:Comment:13322009-10-07T05:29:57.000ZViviana Arteagahttp://www.authors.com/profile/VivianaArteaga
Ja ja Darn not another mistake!! Thanks for pointing it out for me.
Ja ja Darn not another mistake!! Thanks for pointing it out for me. Viviana I think it's very goo…tag:www.authors.com,2009-10-07:3798404:Comment:13272009-10-07T04:52:06.000ZKay Elizabethhttp://www.authors.com/profile/Kay
Viviana I think it's very good too. And as for not noticing that, you're not the only one that does that. I found a typo in a poem I'd written five years ago just recently. I must have read that poem a million times! We get so used to reading our own writing we miss things. :)<br />
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(P.S. I would make guest "guests").
Viviana I think it's very good too. And as for not noticing that, you're not the only one that does that. I found a typo in a poem I'd written five years ago just recently. I must have read that poem a million times! We get so used to reading our own writing we miss things. :)<br />
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(P.S. I would make guest "guests"). Hee hee I never noticed that!…tag:www.authors.com,2009-10-06:3798404:Comment:13092009-10-06T03:00:51.000ZViviana Arteagahttp://www.authors.com/profile/VivianaArteaga
Hee hee I never noticed that! Thanks for that! I'll write it down.
Hee hee I never noticed that! Thanks for that! I'll write it down. That is hauntingly beautiful,…tag:www.authors.com,2009-10-06:3798404:Comment:13042009-10-06T02:54:00.000Zscribblerhttp://www.authors.com/profile/scribbler
That is hauntingly beautiful, Viviana. I think it works whether you use just the first section or both.<br />
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I have one suggestion if you're open to that. You used blow and blown close together. I would break that up. The first one "has blown out" I would change to "extinguished". (And the Father extinguished the candles).
That is hauntingly beautiful, Viviana. I think it works whether you use just the first section or both.<br />
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I have one suggestion if you're open to that. You used blow and blown close together. I would break that up. The first one "has blown out" I would change to "extinguished". (And the Father extinguished the candles).