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                  Water

Roars down the mountian

Always to the sea

The mother of creation

Flows wild and free

Rises to the heavens

Floats upon a breeze

Falls as a gift of life

Soaks the grass and trees

When the need is pressing

Comes to save the day

Sometimes with great violence

Washes all away

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Comment by JB Sullivan on July 17, 2011 at 4:53pm
Keith, its fine. The beat is solid. Makes a good mini-story too. I got a bit tongue tied on "Falls as a gift of life" as the words are closely former but otherwise, I enjoyed it. Hope this helps. :)
Comment by JB Sullivan on July 17, 2011 at 4:56pm
*FORMED ~ sorry/ typo.
Comment by Pritha Chattopadhyay on July 19, 2011 at 11:53am
Simple, genuine and rhythmic... liked it

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