Rain Falls On Manhattan

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Permalink Reply by Cymbric Early-Smith on May 21, 2012 at 5:22am

Hi Kylie!

    I read your piece.  It has quite a nice stream-of-consciousness feel that definitely evokes both a clear image as well as a fun array of emotions.  

    Since you took the trouble to post it here, I was was wondering if you were only interested in general feedback, which I've already provided, or something more focused?  

    I've edited several collections of poetry and it can be a very delicate dance in giving editing advice/feedback, especially with poetry.   I think that's because for many of us, poetry can have a much deeper connection with who we are as a person, compared to fiction writing where it's a much more outward projection.  Anyway, I would be happy to be more specific, however only if you were open to that.

Have a great evening,

Cym

Permalink Reply by Kylie Ferrell on May 21, 2012 at 11:19pm

Hi Cym,

Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to respond!  I am open to and appreciate more focused feedback, as well.  I'm always striving to be a better writer/poet, so please share your thoughts.

I also have more poetry posted on my blog, if you're interested.  =)

http://ferrells-follies.blogspot.com/

~Kylie

Permalink Reply by Cymbric Early-Smith on May 21, 2012 at 11:37pm

  Hi Kylie!  I am definitely interested in reading more of your poetry.  I will check it out.  In fact, I'll do that before I give you more specific feedback on this other, so I can get a better sense of the rhythm and stylistic themes of your work, rather than jumping in and suggesting something you may have a perfect grasp of already.  - Hope that makes sense.  ;)

~ Cym

Permalink Reply by Jack Prendergast on May 25, 2012 at 6:35am

Hi Kylie,

quite lovely, if rather Taxi Driver lonely, coupled with an original, sombre-reflective mood.

You've nailed pretty much what it feels like to be marooned in a city of eight million souls; seemingly doomed to be always waiting, waiting, waiting...

You've reminded me of how much Manhattan had gotten into my soul ... I lurve New York...

Kind regards ... and keep writing!

Jack...

Permalink Reply by Kylie Ferrell on May 25, 2012 at 8:22pm

Hi Jack,

Thank you so much for your comment.  It makes me feel better to know that I'm not the only one who's fallen in love with a city that's both beautiful and brutal.

Since you enjoyed this poem, I encourage you to sign up to follow my poetry blog.  I cherish the feedback given by fellow writers!

http://ferrells-follies.blogspot.com/

~Kylie